What my mind saw? (feel free to unpublish if does not seem/feel appropriate)
First second – words play def-eated. d.featured Da fii ted!
Second second – rational analysis Leafs are perenials. It’s part of the cycle for leafs to fall. Why the tears then?
Third second – emotional drawing - decreasing tone does indicate the defeating feeling
Fourth second – personal references I lived them words. I changed them words. Both leafs and tears.
Fifth second – observational: how powerful a leading word can be to set the tone of a poem. If I’d set an empowering word, the rest would change, from emotional inference to even meaning! Bewildered! Each falling leaf, a tear. Envisioning! Each falling leaf, a tear. Energized! Each falling leaf, a tear. Drained…Each falling leaf, a tear. In awe! Each falling leaf, a tear. Disappointed! Each falling leaf, a tear. Doubtful! Each falling leaf, a tear. Hopeful! Each falling leaf, a tear. Enthusiastic!Each falling leaf, a tear.
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Would love to hear what your mind saw reading it.
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it’s autumn, and I’ve just heard that my friend has lost her battle with cancer
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What my mind saw? (feel free to unpublish if does not seem/feel appropriate)
First second – words play
def-eated.
d.featured
Da fii ted!
Second second – rational analysis
Leafs are perenials. It’s part of the cycle for leafs to fall. Why the tears then?
Third second – emotional drawing
- decreasing tone does indicate the defeating feeling
Fourth second – personal references
I lived them words. I changed them words. Both leafs and tears.
Fifth second – observational: how powerful a leading word can be to set the tone of a poem. If I’d set an empowering word, the rest would change, from emotional inference to even meaning!
Bewildered! Each falling leaf, a tear.
Envisioning! Each falling leaf, a tear.
Energized! Each falling leaf, a tear.
Drained…Each falling leaf, a tear.
In awe! Each falling leaf, a tear.
Disappointed! Each falling leaf, a tear.
Doubtful! Each falling leaf, a tear.
Hopeful! Each falling leaf, a tear.
Enthusiastic!Each falling leaf, a tear.